Post by rll110 on Oct 27, 2009 13:12:22 GMT -5
I've got a wild idea. What about a sequal for The Immortal? I've come up with a general story line for it but I don't have the computer skills to make the game myself. If any out there does please responed.
I would like somethings about the sequal to be different. For example the confrintations with the Goblins and the Trolls. Instead of the duck and swing thing where the stand stationary during the fight I would like the screne not to change at all. Making them fight in the over head screne way gives the player the chance to see the wizard and the knights that will go with him in this story fight their attackers all at the same time.
Also really want to leave the the bats and the worms that eat you out of this version. I found them both REALLY ANOYING IN THE FRIST IMMORTAL!!!!!!!
Finally let's have the wizard's offensive magic hurt the Goblins and the Trolls this time. In the NES version of this game the fire balls that the wizard shot at them, somehow, didn't burn them. I never once bought that. What is their skin, somehow, fire proof? If it was than why were they affraid of the dragon? I don't know what the designers were thinking.
Anyway, below is the ruff story line that I've come up with. I hope some one out there likes it.
P.S. I'm not doing this for money. I would just write a sequel to The Immortal for fun because I'm just that big a fan.
(The Scenario)
The Red Rose Knights vs. The Black Violet Empire
The Immortal II
By: Ryan Lee Lawrence
Based on Characters by Will Harvey’s The Immortal
After the wizard and Anna left the dungeon he went to his master, Mordamir’s, castle hoping to learn more about his past. There the wizard found a secret passageway in Mordamir’s study that led to a room beneth his form mentor’s castle. Inside he found a caldron with strange markings etched on it, a spell book with white crystals stitched into the leather cover, a strange full-length mirror mounted into the wall, and Mordamir’s diary to explain it all.
As the wizard reads he discovers that Mordamir, in fact, belonged to a secret and ancient order of wizards called the Nearify Circles. In the diary Mordamir claims that this order had existed for 300 years before his underground city was destroyed and that the order wielded tremendous power; enough to create the fountain, the city, and the dragons themselves. All thanks to a concentration of magical given to them by the five mythical races.
The story goes that the kings of the remaining Dwarf, Elf, Night Wood Fairies, Drow, and Mermen Kind nations gave the Nearify Circles the greatest part of their remaining magical energy because of the wizards’ skills and because men were the only ones that survive having so much power put into them at once. They did it under a pact that the wizards would create a great underground city, share it with them, and protect them from the world of men. The wizards kept the first two parts of their bargain but failed, badly, on the third.
The wizards of the Nearify Circle cared little about their promise to what, they called. the Noll Kind. Instead they dug so deep, so greedily into the belly of Mt. Ressner that they encroached on Goblin and Troll territory. This carelessness led to war and to heavy losses for the Noll Kind. But worst still was the discovery of the entrances to the underground city.
Facing war with the Goblins, the Trolls, and now a kingdom of men that Mordamir calls the Red Roses because that is their standard the wizards get desperate. They create seven giant dragons fierce, strong, indestructible, and loyal; or so they thought.
They told the Noll Kind that they meant to send the dragons to guard the entrances to the city. Instead The wizards only had the dragons surround two miles around the Fountain Of Youth. This was the part of the city where only humans lived. The wizards of the Nearify Circle thought that they would be rid of the Noll Kind, the various creatures they brought with them, and their enemies that same time; they were wrong.
Vain about their skills they were careless in the final part of the spell that brought the dragons to life. The Nearify Circle failed to prevent the dragons from gaining their own will and desire so the beasts turned on them in the same hour the wizards enemies attacked their city again.
This time the Goblin, the Troll, and the forces of men we’re in greater number. What remained of the Noll Kind’s armies we’re split between the invaders’ attack and trying to fend off the immortal dragons meant to protect them. Even the powers the Nearify Circle couldn’t prevent the invading armies from ransacking most of the city or kill all the dragons. One dragon escaped, the Noll Kind were scattered, and more than half of the wizard order itself was killed within a day.
Eventually Mordamir and the remaining Nearify Circle repelled the invading armies but that wasn’t the end of it. The one dragon that escaped returned and destroyed what remained of the city. It killed most of the human citizens that remained and forced what was left of the Nearify Circle to flea far from the mountain.
Only seven of the Nearify Circle escaped Mt. Ressner and placed the blame for their bloody defeat squarely on their leader Mordamir. They charged that his greed, carelessness, and hubris led him to create the dragons and the flawed weapon, a magic amulet, that was supposed to protect them in case the dragons turned on them. The wizards called Mordamir a coward for not willingly giving up his own life by reading the incantation that would’ve destroyed and the dragons and him when he had the chance. Mordamir was ejected from the order but he got away with the spell book, his cauldron, and the mirror.
The cauldron is simply called a Creation Boil because the Nearify Circle used them to create an assortment of magical items; everything from weapons to riches. In his diary, Mordamir, explains that this is how he built his castle and how the order bench to build the underground city.
In the spell book the wizard finds not only the spells needed to use the cauldron and make himself richer than his former mentor but how to use the mirror as well. The spell book is a compilation of the Nearify Circle’s power and, in time, the wizard learns to use its full fulcrum. Including how to turn the mirror into a gateway that can take him anywhere another enchanted mirror is placed. But not even Nearify Circle’s power can stave back death forever.
Two years after the wizard and Anna escaped from Mt. Ressner they were married. They lived together in Mordamir’s castle for 500 years thanks to the wizard’s magic. He used his newfound power to extend her life and his but the wizard, having drank from the fountain to restore his youth the first time, had a much longer life then his wife.
As the years went by the wizard realized that his wife would die of old age long before him and there was nothing his magic could do about it. The more her strength waned the sadder he became with the knowledge that he would soon be left alone. Until one night his castle was raided by an army of men that bore a red rose as their standard.
The attack was sudden and the knights of what was now the Barrier Rose Empire were better armed magically than any nights the wizard had ever heard of. After the wizard’s servants were captured, his guards killed, and the wizard’s hands bound behind his back a strange man made the wizard an offer.
The man, who never shows his face, claims to be the king of the Barrier Rose Empire and that the Goblin and Troll nations have called a truce in their conflict. Also that they are, in fact, interbreeding and creating powerful monsters using spells found in the underground city inside Mt. Ressner in preparation for an attack on his capital city. Then he says that thanks to a small group of Dwarf tradesmen another mirror has been placed just past the dragon that prevents all from entering the part of the city that holds the fountain.
The unified Goblin and Troll nations, now the Black Violet Empire, have been using several more mirrors to get in and out of the city for years by then. With the dragon blocking the entrance to that part of the city the Black Violet Empire has been able to amass a huge army without fear of invasion. King Ballar needs this to stop now.
That’s why his wizards have created a spell to activate the wizard’s and the mirror in Mt. Ressner but they are not powerful enough to use it. So King Ballar wants the wizard to use the spell so that he and several of his men can sneak into the under ground city to find the other seven mirrors. Then the wizard can use his power to connect them magically to the wizard’s mirror so that King Ballard’s whole army can get into the city. In exchange The King offers the wizard access to the fountain. At the point of the sword and the desperation of a loving husband the wizard accepts.
After the wizard and the other men find and connect the seven Black Violet mirrors to the mirror in the wizard’s castle the Red Rose Knights seize the barracks where they are held. It isn’t long before the Red Rose Knights occupy at least half the once human controlled inner city.
When they reach the Nearify Circle’s strong hold, built around the fountain, King Ballar tells the wizard that he needs his power to open it to its full strength because Black Violet sorcerers never could. But when they find the fountain of youth it is flowing perfectly. Just before one of King Ballar’s men is about to ask him what’s going on King Ballar uses the same spell he used to restrain the wizard earlier on him and his own men.
Unable to move or speak the wizard and the others are forced to watch as King Ballar walks over to the fountain but doesn’t touch it. Instead he stands over what looks like a stone coffin and removes his helmet. What the wizard and the others see isn’t the face of a man; it’s an Elf’s.
Before he uses a red emerald ring to break the magical seal protecting the coffin and pries the lid open with his sword he calls out a name in a mournful, desperate tone. “Lesia.” When he flings open the lid a beautiful Elven woman sits up, he lifts her out of the coffin, and the drama begins. I’ll bake over it latter but it will sound something like this. The elf really isn’t King Ballar because there never was a King Ballar or the royal lineage that the Red Rose Empire stemmed from.
During the attack on the city fifteen hundred years ago Lesia and some other Elves were trapped in the wizards’ strong hold but she managed to protect herself by using her power to seal herself in a stone coffin. But her love, Ro-Gon, was captured by Goblins and take to the surface.
He escaped but he couldn’t get back into Mt. Ressner because Goblins controlled it. Ro-Gon needed an army of his own so he took the place of the man that was meant to be king of the human kingdom that attacked the underground city. He ordered his identity kept secret until a new name every eighty years but never showed his true face. This gave him time to build his army and it was torture for him.
During the fifteen hundered years he waited to build a large enough army to retake the mountain he and his love for telepathically connected. Ro-Gon felt Lesia’s desperation and they longed for each other ever since.
Ro-Gon became a bitter man during that time and so his hatred for Goblins, Trolls, Humans, and even the other creatures that he once lived in harmony with grew. So when he’s reunited with Lesia he tells her that he’s had it with all of them and would not let them interfere in their lives again.
Ro-Gon has a map, a small bag of dust, and an hour glass in the leather pouch on his belt. The map leads out of the inner city and to a path that runs all the way behind the mountain. There’s enough sand in the hour glass for one hour’s time to pass. He sets the glass in front of the wizard and then spreads the dust on the wizard’s face. The dust is the magical dust of compliance.
Ro-Gon tells the wizard to use the amulet his former master Mordamir wanted him to use on the dragon when the sand in the hour glass runs out. He’ll say something to her like. “Let them all die! I don’t carry more.” Because he knows that by then he and Lesia will be gone by then. Also, that the amulet will destroy his human army, the Goblins, the Trolls, and the dragon. Then the city will be theirs to return to with the rest of what is left of the Elf race.
But she says that it’s wrong and they get into a lover’s quarrel where somehow she breaks the spell. Then the wizard and Ro-Gon get into a hard fight. When the wizard wins she goes back into the coffin which she describes as a charmed, dream intensive sleep. The wizard gathers some water while the knights run to tell the others what happened. The wizard escapes with the water the end.
This is just an outline. I can make this drama well constructed if I had cause to. But I can say that the wizard will be thoughtful at the end and that he and Anna will happily ever after.
I would like somethings about the sequal to be different. For example the confrintations with the Goblins and the Trolls. Instead of the duck and swing thing where the stand stationary during the fight I would like the screne not to change at all. Making them fight in the over head screne way gives the player the chance to see the wizard and the knights that will go with him in this story fight their attackers all at the same time.
Also really want to leave the the bats and the worms that eat you out of this version. I found them both REALLY ANOYING IN THE FRIST IMMORTAL!!!!!!!
Finally let's have the wizard's offensive magic hurt the Goblins and the Trolls this time. In the NES version of this game the fire balls that the wizard shot at them, somehow, didn't burn them. I never once bought that. What is their skin, somehow, fire proof? If it was than why were they affraid of the dragon? I don't know what the designers were thinking.
Anyway, below is the ruff story line that I've come up with. I hope some one out there likes it.
P.S. I'm not doing this for money. I would just write a sequel to The Immortal for fun because I'm just that big a fan.
(The Scenario)
The Red Rose Knights vs. The Black Violet Empire
The Immortal II
By: Ryan Lee Lawrence
Based on Characters by Will Harvey’s The Immortal
After the wizard and Anna left the dungeon he went to his master, Mordamir’s, castle hoping to learn more about his past. There the wizard found a secret passageway in Mordamir’s study that led to a room beneth his form mentor’s castle. Inside he found a caldron with strange markings etched on it, a spell book with white crystals stitched into the leather cover, a strange full-length mirror mounted into the wall, and Mordamir’s diary to explain it all.
As the wizard reads he discovers that Mordamir, in fact, belonged to a secret and ancient order of wizards called the Nearify Circles. In the diary Mordamir claims that this order had existed for 300 years before his underground city was destroyed and that the order wielded tremendous power; enough to create the fountain, the city, and the dragons themselves. All thanks to a concentration of magical given to them by the five mythical races.
The story goes that the kings of the remaining Dwarf, Elf, Night Wood Fairies, Drow, and Mermen Kind nations gave the Nearify Circles the greatest part of their remaining magical energy because of the wizards’ skills and because men were the only ones that survive having so much power put into them at once. They did it under a pact that the wizards would create a great underground city, share it with them, and protect them from the world of men. The wizards kept the first two parts of their bargain but failed, badly, on the third.
The wizards of the Nearify Circle cared little about their promise to what, they called. the Noll Kind. Instead they dug so deep, so greedily into the belly of Mt. Ressner that they encroached on Goblin and Troll territory. This carelessness led to war and to heavy losses for the Noll Kind. But worst still was the discovery of the entrances to the underground city.
Facing war with the Goblins, the Trolls, and now a kingdom of men that Mordamir calls the Red Roses because that is their standard the wizards get desperate. They create seven giant dragons fierce, strong, indestructible, and loyal; or so they thought.
They told the Noll Kind that they meant to send the dragons to guard the entrances to the city. Instead The wizards only had the dragons surround two miles around the Fountain Of Youth. This was the part of the city where only humans lived. The wizards of the Nearify Circle thought that they would be rid of the Noll Kind, the various creatures they brought with them, and their enemies that same time; they were wrong.
Vain about their skills they were careless in the final part of the spell that brought the dragons to life. The Nearify Circle failed to prevent the dragons from gaining their own will and desire so the beasts turned on them in the same hour the wizards enemies attacked their city again.
This time the Goblin, the Troll, and the forces of men we’re in greater number. What remained of the Noll Kind’s armies we’re split between the invaders’ attack and trying to fend off the immortal dragons meant to protect them. Even the powers the Nearify Circle couldn’t prevent the invading armies from ransacking most of the city or kill all the dragons. One dragon escaped, the Noll Kind were scattered, and more than half of the wizard order itself was killed within a day.
Eventually Mordamir and the remaining Nearify Circle repelled the invading armies but that wasn’t the end of it. The one dragon that escaped returned and destroyed what remained of the city. It killed most of the human citizens that remained and forced what was left of the Nearify Circle to flea far from the mountain.
Only seven of the Nearify Circle escaped Mt. Ressner and placed the blame for their bloody defeat squarely on their leader Mordamir. They charged that his greed, carelessness, and hubris led him to create the dragons and the flawed weapon, a magic amulet, that was supposed to protect them in case the dragons turned on them. The wizards called Mordamir a coward for not willingly giving up his own life by reading the incantation that would’ve destroyed and the dragons and him when he had the chance. Mordamir was ejected from the order but he got away with the spell book, his cauldron, and the mirror.
The cauldron is simply called a Creation Boil because the Nearify Circle used them to create an assortment of magical items; everything from weapons to riches. In his diary, Mordamir, explains that this is how he built his castle and how the order bench to build the underground city.
In the spell book the wizard finds not only the spells needed to use the cauldron and make himself richer than his former mentor but how to use the mirror as well. The spell book is a compilation of the Nearify Circle’s power and, in time, the wizard learns to use its full fulcrum. Including how to turn the mirror into a gateway that can take him anywhere another enchanted mirror is placed. But not even Nearify Circle’s power can stave back death forever.
Two years after the wizard and Anna escaped from Mt. Ressner they were married. They lived together in Mordamir’s castle for 500 years thanks to the wizard’s magic. He used his newfound power to extend her life and his but the wizard, having drank from the fountain to restore his youth the first time, had a much longer life then his wife.
As the years went by the wizard realized that his wife would die of old age long before him and there was nothing his magic could do about it. The more her strength waned the sadder he became with the knowledge that he would soon be left alone. Until one night his castle was raided by an army of men that bore a red rose as their standard.
The attack was sudden and the knights of what was now the Barrier Rose Empire were better armed magically than any nights the wizard had ever heard of. After the wizard’s servants were captured, his guards killed, and the wizard’s hands bound behind his back a strange man made the wizard an offer.
The man, who never shows his face, claims to be the king of the Barrier Rose Empire and that the Goblin and Troll nations have called a truce in their conflict. Also that they are, in fact, interbreeding and creating powerful monsters using spells found in the underground city inside Mt. Ressner in preparation for an attack on his capital city. Then he says that thanks to a small group of Dwarf tradesmen another mirror has been placed just past the dragon that prevents all from entering the part of the city that holds the fountain.
The unified Goblin and Troll nations, now the Black Violet Empire, have been using several more mirrors to get in and out of the city for years by then. With the dragon blocking the entrance to that part of the city the Black Violet Empire has been able to amass a huge army without fear of invasion. King Ballar needs this to stop now.
That’s why his wizards have created a spell to activate the wizard’s and the mirror in Mt. Ressner but they are not powerful enough to use it. So King Ballar wants the wizard to use the spell so that he and several of his men can sneak into the under ground city to find the other seven mirrors. Then the wizard can use his power to connect them magically to the wizard’s mirror so that King Ballard’s whole army can get into the city. In exchange The King offers the wizard access to the fountain. At the point of the sword and the desperation of a loving husband the wizard accepts.
After the wizard and the other men find and connect the seven Black Violet mirrors to the mirror in the wizard’s castle the Red Rose Knights seize the barracks where they are held. It isn’t long before the Red Rose Knights occupy at least half the once human controlled inner city.
When they reach the Nearify Circle’s strong hold, built around the fountain, King Ballar tells the wizard that he needs his power to open it to its full strength because Black Violet sorcerers never could. But when they find the fountain of youth it is flowing perfectly. Just before one of King Ballar’s men is about to ask him what’s going on King Ballar uses the same spell he used to restrain the wizard earlier on him and his own men.
Unable to move or speak the wizard and the others are forced to watch as King Ballar walks over to the fountain but doesn’t touch it. Instead he stands over what looks like a stone coffin and removes his helmet. What the wizard and the others see isn’t the face of a man; it’s an Elf’s.
Before he uses a red emerald ring to break the magical seal protecting the coffin and pries the lid open with his sword he calls out a name in a mournful, desperate tone. “Lesia.” When he flings open the lid a beautiful Elven woman sits up, he lifts her out of the coffin, and the drama begins. I’ll bake over it latter but it will sound something like this. The elf really isn’t King Ballar because there never was a King Ballar or the royal lineage that the Red Rose Empire stemmed from.
During the attack on the city fifteen hundred years ago Lesia and some other Elves were trapped in the wizards’ strong hold but she managed to protect herself by using her power to seal herself in a stone coffin. But her love, Ro-Gon, was captured by Goblins and take to the surface.
He escaped but he couldn’t get back into Mt. Ressner because Goblins controlled it. Ro-Gon needed an army of his own so he took the place of the man that was meant to be king of the human kingdom that attacked the underground city. He ordered his identity kept secret until a new name every eighty years but never showed his true face. This gave him time to build his army and it was torture for him.
During the fifteen hundered years he waited to build a large enough army to retake the mountain he and his love for telepathically connected. Ro-Gon felt Lesia’s desperation and they longed for each other ever since.
Ro-Gon became a bitter man during that time and so his hatred for Goblins, Trolls, Humans, and even the other creatures that he once lived in harmony with grew. So when he’s reunited with Lesia he tells her that he’s had it with all of them and would not let them interfere in their lives again.
Ro-Gon has a map, a small bag of dust, and an hour glass in the leather pouch on his belt. The map leads out of the inner city and to a path that runs all the way behind the mountain. There’s enough sand in the hour glass for one hour’s time to pass. He sets the glass in front of the wizard and then spreads the dust on the wizard’s face. The dust is the magical dust of compliance.
Ro-Gon tells the wizard to use the amulet his former master Mordamir wanted him to use on the dragon when the sand in the hour glass runs out. He’ll say something to her like. “Let them all die! I don’t carry more.” Because he knows that by then he and Lesia will be gone by then. Also, that the amulet will destroy his human army, the Goblins, the Trolls, and the dragon. Then the city will be theirs to return to with the rest of what is left of the Elf race.
But she says that it’s wrong and they get into a lover’s quarrel where somehow she breaks the spell. Then the wizard and Ro-Gon get into a hard fight. When the wizard wins she goes back into the coffin which she describes as a charmed, dream intensive sleep. The wizard gathers some water while the knights run to tell the others what happened. The wizard escapes with the water the end.
This is just an outline. I can make this drama well constructed if I had cause to. But I can say that the wizard will be thoughtful at the end and that he and Anna will happily ever after.